ardystic's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[|~Snow Snow For Lucy~|]

B++

this must have taken you forever. i commend you on your will to finish a flash animation of this length. i know i can't go past a month working on any one of mine without giving up on it.

- the music was great. i thought your choices fit very well with their scenes. i was kinda hoping there would be more narration, though. you had some in the beginning and at the end but putting some in the middle would have made it more consistent and would have brought out the characters more, imo. since the quality wasn't at it's best, i think some narration could fill in what we might overlook. for example, when the inventor's dog died, i thought he moved on rather quick. i thought some narration would have been good to describe some of his emotions to really drag out the sadness of the scene.

- the animation was pretty good considering how long this thing is. nothing really stood out though. it was just good enough to tell the story.

- the story itself was good but also a bit disappointing. personally, it bothered me that the story lacked a character to really hate. the inventor was looking to be this character but then he goes and shows us his soft side with the dog scene (one of my favorite parts, btw) and also gives lucy new arms and the toy shop. with the inventor being both evil and nice, i think it took away the possible emotional build up for when lucy finally escapes his hold on her. but the story takes an unexpected turn with him leaving everything to her so it kinda dampens the satisfaction of her freedom at the end a bit.

overall, this was a good animation but i thought it could have been more powerful than it was.

SpikeVallentine responds:

i'm not into narration. I prefer to tell the story through actions. Cinematic story telling. Not a story book.

"i thought he moved on rather quick."
It was a jump cut. but my fault for having someone feel he moved on too quick.

Narration someones emotions, sorry, i' don't think i'll ever do that. Aint my style.

I agree, the story is disappointing. Basicaly, all the characters in here are "fake", they're not genuine. I need to live life more before I can have genuine stories. Interesting point of view, about dampening satisfaction. but i prefer to attempt character growth.

"it could have been more powerful than it was."
Times 1 million

[Bound on Earth]

great animation

i don't get it since i've never played earthbound but the animation was top notch. how did you do the backgrounds? did you do them in photoshop? nice work.

MichaFrario responds:

I wrote it in the credits:

Paint Tool SAI: http://sai.detstwo.com/

[Life Jackets]

ok...............

not really a fan of mindless violence (not anymore, anyway) but it was alright. when the message to wear life jackets showed up, i thought you were going to show all the scenes again with the guys wearing the jackets and they somehow survive their ordeal in a ridiculous way.

if you're still looking for an audio editing program, google Audacity. it's free and pretty solid.

LifeJackets responds:

Thanks

[A Gift to the Face]

great short

that was a good one even though i knew what was coming. i thought "hmmm, that gift maker looks a lot like a cannon. i wonder if he's gonna -- yep. there it is."

StickDinosaur responds:

Haha it's funnier when you say it

[Left 4 Bed]

lol

rape is only funny when it's over the top.

Sh0T-D0wN responds:

"Over the top"?

[School Project]

good

you had some nice animation going on in a few places. most notably the mouse and red scarf.

foolishcharacter responds:

Thanks, I like what I did there too, but even then the mouse just kinda 'disappears' of the screen. I barely made the deadline with this, and I didn't have a lot of time to begin with. Now that I can do this on my freetime, I hope to create some more intricate presonal driven projects.

[The white box short]

you had something goin

shame you didn't keep goin. it looked like you were going to get into a "animator vs. animation" type deal which is always interesting because you can get really creative with how your figures interact with the environment. not too bad for a first submission. at least i could tell this had some thought and effort put into it unlike some others i've seen.

tips:

-instead of using a song, sound effects would've been much better since you animated explosions.

-text color should've been darker. blue and green are close in value so it was a little hard to read

-use easing for your tweens. it would help create a sense of gravity when objects drop like when your character was dropping his weapons.

christolilov responds:

Thanks for your review, I appreciate it.
Truth is I didnt make it longer and with sound effects because I got lazy...
Just wanted to know if someone likes the idea and my animation style.
Since its obviously still here and even got a relatively good score for a 50 second crappy flash Ill make a second version of it.Longer and with effects...

[Half Beard]

pretty funny

kept me entertained. and you know that reverse goatee ain't such a bad idea.

Bobert-Rob responds:

It really isn't too bad of one, but it's much more normal than half beard. With Reverse goatee, you could say it's just a neck beard or something, but half beard... well, there's no escaping the oddness of that style, heh. I love it. Glad you like it!

[Spaced Out! (Pilot)]

ahah. i am now a robo bob fan.

lol awesome work. i think robo bob was great. please work on the next episode.

grim-studios responds:

Already am. :)